Drafting and planning- Draft

This is my draft magazine. I presented them all in front of my class and they gave me a lot of constructive criticism. They let me know that there was a lot of negative space and that some of the cover lines were not easy to read. therefore that i needed to change the colour of my writing or the wallpaper. The writing that went over my contents page image was also seen as a negative as it did not look like a contents page. My peers also suggested that i make the girl on the double page spread smaller and put the other girl off the main image on the other side and this was very useful criticism. 
My teacher then also gave me some criticism that i need to remove 1st from the date line and i also need to get rid of the negative space. I also need to include reviews on my contents and link my contents, front page and double page spread together for example have on the contents about the Vixxens then put a page number and put the page number on the double page spread.